T1+Writing

**Tuesday 5th April 2011**

__ //WALT - write an argument using persuasive language features to convince people to visit the Bay of Plenty.// __

__ Success Criteria __ My writing contains an introduction, 3 key arguments and a conclusion I will state and restate my opinion I use a range of language resources and punctuation My paragraphs follow the S E E structure

__**Why people should visit the BOP**__

Would you like to have the experience of a lifetime without it costing too much? Well you need to come to the BOP New Zealand.There is a whole range of things to do there, and there will be some times where you won’t want to do it,but I say if you don’t you will regret it **Big Time**.You will see amazing views and get what you pay for,the experience is great.I believe that NZ is one of the best countries in the world,it may be small but is packed with fun things to do and unbelieveable views,and scenery that will just blow you away.

The Bay of Plenty has an amazing scenery and you won’t see anything like this, anywhere else.There are so many native plants and trees, that wherever you look there will be another one right there that you will admire.Like when you have the chance to go to Papamoa you can go to the Looking Glass Gardens,and when you are walking around at all of the sculptures you will also see some of the best,flowers and trees set out so you can look at them and think ‘WOW,this looks absolutely amazing I will never for get how great this is.’

I believe that BOP NZ has some of the cleanest and most beautiful beaches in the world,nearly wherever you go,that place will have a clean beach that has no rubbish anywhere and some of the most biggest Pohutakawa trees.If you are looking for a specific beach with smooth sand and nice blue waves,then I recommend that you come to the Mount it has giant trees that will give you shade when it gets too hot,it also has lots of small Islands that you can go to like ‘Rabbit Island’.Rabbit Island is nearly fully on the beach,there are rocks,grass and lots of sand that builds up a walkway onto the Island.This beach I think is the best in New Zealand that I have been to in my whole life.The sand is really smooth and the water is always a glassy blue,I guarantee that when you come you will stay for the whole day,and when you have finished you can grab an ice-cream to cool off.The best time of year to come visit is in the summer where you can hang out with friends and have a BBQ in the evening.

When you come to the BOP you will have a whole lot of things to choose from wherever you go.I personally think that Tauranga and Rotorua are the two best places to go when you are in the Bay of Plenty.There is a whole range of things to do at a cheap price like in Rotorua you can go to the Luge and the Gondalas.I believe that the best thing to do in Rotorua is the Rotorua Redwoods,you can get a really fit while having so much fun there are lots of different things you can do at the Redwoods like,mountain biking, tramps, orienteering, horse riding, you can also bring your dog and walk him/her. Therefore, wherever you go in the BOP you will find something exciting and fun to do and while doing it you learn all the things about New Zealand.

So, if you don’t want to miss out on these great experiences that will just pull you towards them,then bring the family or you can go just by yourself, to the Bay of Plenty and have the time of your life.The scenery is just absolutely amazing, you will never get another experience like this anywhere else. It is my firm belief that if you want to go somewhere nice and relaxing but also has a ton of things to do then I recommend the Bay of Plenty,it is the best place to go when your blue and you are on a budget.

Fantastic piece of writing Shelby. Excellent progress has been made here, well done. You have used paragraphs correctly and you have an excellent introduction that states your 3 ideas, as well as a conclusion that restates them. You use personal pronouns well to and are beginning to use a range of language resources to improve your writing. You now need to focus on using stronger imperatives to really convince me. Try not to use the words I think.... Make it stronger like I know... You can also now focus on linking your paragraphs e.g. my first reason, secondly, finally, another reason.... Overall a superb effort Shelby, well done. Miss Crone :)

__Monday 16th May__

